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Synap

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Alan..a bit off topic but I was digging thru some stuff I'd saved to HDD from the old EZboard TB incarnation and found 26 chapters of Forever After you'd written in the Purple Prose section in early 2001. The PP section's long gone from EZ BTW.

Was there more? Did you stash a copy somewhere?
Forever After - The Hagan Family Journals

Day One
Monday, March 26, 2001 - 7:00 p.m.

There is an old military maxim that states if you want to launch a surprise attack one of the best times to do it is in the hour before dawn. It is at this time that Man's spirit is at its lowest ebb and he is most likely to be asleep. The Russians thought so too and thus we slept through the opening of World War Three.

The war started as an otherwise ordinary weekday. It had been a long weekend, we'd gotten to bed late and the 5:05 a.m. our clock radio alarm was set to came much too early. The radio faithfully clicked on and for a few seconds the middle strains of Aaron Copeland's Appalachian Spring filled the room and then clicked off. I thought nothing of it, we commonly hit the snooze button once before we actually get up so reckoned my wife Ann had done so. Some time later she admitted to me that she thought I had. It was some hours before we realized that it was actually the high altitude EMP burst destroying the national electrical grid which caused our radio to fail....
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usnret92

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story

A.T. I had read this story back before TB2 format was changed. It has got me reading more storie of this type both on frugal squirrel and tb2 (dark winter). Thanks for all your eefforts :sal:
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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Synap said:
Alan..a bit off topic but I was digging thru some stuff I'd saved to HDD from the old EZboard TB incarnation and found 26 chapters of Forever After you'd written in the Purple Prose section in early 2001. The PP section's long gone from EZ BTW.

Was there more? Did you stash a copy somewhere?
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Synap, that story was awful. Do you really want me to post it?

.....Alan.
 
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hummer

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A.T.Hagan said:
Synap, that story was awful. Do you really want me to post it?

.....Alan.
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Hi. Yes.......I remember that story from way back. Alan, post it for us, please? :) Thanks, hummer p.s. And it was not awful. :)
 
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Chapulin

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Go ahead or update it!
It was a good story if I remember correctly. Initiate it and see what the current crew thinks.

Chap
 
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Synap

Deceased
A.T.Hagan said:
Synap, that story was awful. Do you really want me to post it? .....Alan.
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Why not? If only to get into the present TB incarnation archives It's a good short story. I don't think it was "awful", altho maybe today could be updated a bit with future year dates or remove 'em entirely. Maybe instead of your name as diary writer some other.

Hey lottsa great authors publish stuff like that as shorts that sorta feel "awful" to them..hehe..especially later as they've grown a bit. And sometimes they'll take those as a sorta outline to fill out or update later into a more complete piece.

OTOH, reposting as is gives a TB lookback at some of the things we all were thinking could happen then. Lookbacks give a perspective on current event thinking. One of the reason I occasionally search back in TB's archives to see what I and others were thinking about similar subjects over time.

Besides, I think your affective use of blackpowder cannons is almost unique in this genre.
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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Alright then, I think I've got a copy of it on a Zip disk somewhere. I'll see if I can find it.

.....Alan.
 
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Synap

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Alan -- I took what I had And copied the text minus the ezboard headers/footers into a simple Word doc (Wordpad). Easier to read than with all the bbs stuff. : If you want it holler. It zips to 290kb. Meant to get back to ya earlier and offer but got distracted.

FYI: without giving too much of the ending away the last lines I have are
...NASA folks promised us a video of the launch, let’s go see about it.”

The End.
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Does that match your's ?
 
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Synap

Deceased
OOPS!!! Sorry Alan..a too late night drain bamage mispost..pulled the quote from the wrong archive..DUH!!

The last section I have for Forever is #26 and it ends at
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Still the same doom and gloom in the news but the day was still pretty good for all that. We needed a good holiday.
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A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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My archived file goes two chapters beyond that, but it is at least one chapter short of what I recall of the ending. The story had gotten long enough that I kept a seperate file of working notes that I may still have around here somewhere as I pulled everything off the old HD onto Zip disks when we got the new computer. I may still have them.

.....Alan.
 
CGTech

CGTech

Has No Life - Lives on TB
Alan, you have a talent for making story very true to life. Could well see this kind of scenario happening with out a doubt. Even without nukes, just a total economic collapse could cause this type of scenario.

Great job! Looking forward to the next chapter! :applaud:
 
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Catshooter

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Mods. can we have a comment thread please?

Alan,

I understand you feel this work is rough, but I'll tell you youshould not be embaressed. This may not be written as you would write it today, but it is still excellent work. Very smooth and captivating.

I and others are enjoying it, I promise.


Cat
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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Some of y'all have said that you'd like to keep the actual "Forever After" story thread clean of non-story posts so that it would be easier to read so I'm starting this thread for any comments that you'd like to make.

The story is several years old now, but one day I may clean it up so if you spot any glaring problems or difficulties do point them out, if you would. I'll file them away with the story as working notes for future revision. Thanks!

.....Alan.
 
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nancy98

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I don't understand why you think this is a poor job at writting. It has me on the edge of my seat.


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seraphima

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Interesting to see what someone with some know-how but little preps makes of the situation - Shelby, that is. A lot of scenario stories have unrealistic amounts of weapons and food, and all characters are either superpreppers or MZBs.

Great story, thanks!
 
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nancy98

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Thanks for this area to post our commits to your story.

It's a great story even if you think it is lacking. We don't think so. So there!!!

LOL
 
Christian for Israel

Christian for Israel

Knight of Jerusalem
seraphima said:
Interesting to see what someone with some know-how but little preps makes of the situation - Shelby, that is. A lot of scenario stories have unrealistic amounts of weapons and food, and all characters are either superpreppers or MZBs.

Great story, thanks!
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guilty as charged...
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Laurane

Laurane

Canadian Loonie
Alan....

wondering why your characters didn't approach the rancher with the cows about bartering goods or services, and in that way producing a "community" which was trying to sruvive?

If that didn't work, then maybe the rustling would happen, but trying to help one another might have worked to everyones' advantage......they are going to be found out anyway, as word would get out abut the soup bones being shared. :lol:

And the tracks leading out from the pasture would be a clue too, especially with the rain/mud.
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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You make a good point, but I was using a real cow pasture belonging to a real family cattle company at the time I wrote that story. They measure their land holdings by the square mile and I had no idea then just where those folks actually lived.

The tracks as you may recall they went to considerable trouble to make sure didn't lead back to where they lived. Given that the entire little community there was in on the rustling they'd all have good reason to keep it to themselves.

.....Alan.
 
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shanco

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The most glaring problem,

is that I could read for hours, but I'll just not fuss and read it as you have it ready. Thanks for bringing this back.
Ann
 
Brutus

Brutus

Membership Revoked
Alan, I don't see why you're so down on this effort of yours. I think that it's quite good. Sure, it could use a little polish here and there, but hell, most everything could.

Count me as another fan.

:)
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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For the benefit of the folks who are realizing that they have some posts in this thread that they actually made in other threads I'd like to explain that I asked Dennis if he'd be so kind as to incorporate them all into this <i>Forever After</i> commentary thread so that everything could be kept neat in all of the relevant threads.

.....Alan.
 
Renegade

Renegade

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Dangit, I KNEW I should have waited till you had it all posted before I started reading it!! But did I listen to myself?? Noooooo.... Now I've got to wait..ever so impatiently...for each chapter.

Swamp cabbage....hadn't had that in a while...:lol:

One of these days I'm going to have to get down there just to shake your hand. You are one hell of a writer.

BTW....I figured I was doing pretty good until you had that sub nuke Tyndell. :rolleyes:
 
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