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Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
lol, ch 27 came up twice. 
Mountain Home
Hi CFI, 28 was a great chapter. I was wondering as I read if maybe after gathering the people in that want to come, if maybe Jack would be thinking about branching out more to get supplies from other places around the country, and if he would be saving some historical things, such as, the Declaration of Independence and things like that. Also, as a reader, I was thinking, after things had calmed down, I'd be thinking about getting books, especially rare ones, and books that would teach the community about medicine and farming etc., to safe places where they could be stored properly. It'd be a shame to let rare books rot somewhere. Then, I'd have to try to store as many CDs, DVDs, and tapes and get musical instruments and get someone to teach the kids to play the different instruments, and of course the great works of art must not be neglected. LOL, the story just makes you think, ok, after this, what would I do next.
Also, when I was reading about transportation, I was thinking about horses . I bet some of those folks would enjoy riding. Maybe Sylvia could ride off into the sunset on one.
I also wondered if there was a nice fishing lake around.
These are just some of the things I got to thinking about as I read this chapter. There are so many directions the story could go. There is enough work to keep everyone busy for a long time.
Hi CFI, 28 was a great chapter. I was wondering as I read if maybe after gathering the people in that want to come, if maybe Jack would be thinking about branching out more to get supplies from other places around the country, and if he would be saving some historical things, such as, the Declaration of Independence and things like that. Also, as a reader, I was thinking, after things had calmed down, I'd be thinking about getting books, especially rare ones, and books that would teach the community about medicine and farming etc., to safe places where they could be stored properly. It'd be a shame to let rare books rot somewhere. Then, I'd have to try to store as many CDs, DVDs, and tapes and get musical instruments and get someone to teach the kids to play the different instruments, and of course the great works of art must not be neglected. LOL, the story just makes you think, ok, after this, what would I do next.
Also, when I was reading about transportation, I was thinking about horses . I bet some of those folks would enjoy riding. Maybe Sylvia could ride off into the sunset on one.
I also wondered if there was a nice fishing lake around.
These are just some of the things I got to thinking about as I read this chapter. There are so many directions the story could go. There is enough work to keep everyone busy for a long time.
I think that having all the people coming to one place is not really a good survival of the species idea - I understand Jack wanting to get as many people as possible for genetic variety but now all the eggs are in one basket so to say and just because Jack is in Idaho does not mean it is the best area for the new start of the human race - just thoughts that came to mind - I would not have gotten people from Europe or at least not all of them - I think it would be better to set up satillite towns and get them set up in different areas apart because now they are even at the wim of nature with rain,drought,freezes etc when they start farming for their food at only one location -
I also feel they need to figure out a way to contact people closer to home - has to be a safe way to contact people - I would imagine there are some good people who do not have access to radio contacts -
I agree having so many people at one place that have come from so many different backgrounds is a fire waiting to happen - another reason to have different groups - of course need to continue contact and have in place a help each other attitude so that later fights over possible limited resources are limited so the whole problem of the human race killing each other does not start over again
that said I do want to say that I am very much enjoying the story and wish we had the money to set things up the way Jack did - must be nice - can dream though of what could do[sigh] - looking forward to my daily fix and am enjoying both stories very much - please please continue both of you writers
I also feel they need to figure out a way to contact people closer to home - has to be a safe way to contact people - I would imagine there are some good people who do not have access to radio contacts -
I agree having so many people at one place that have come from so many different backgrounds is a fire waiting to happen - another reason to have different groups - of course need to continue contact and have in place a help each other attitude so that later fights over possible limited resources are limited so the whole problem of the human race killing each other does not start over again
that said I do want to say that I am very much enjoying the story and wish we had the money to set things up the way Jack did - must be nice - can dream though of what could do[sigh] - looking forward to my daily fix and am enjoying both stories very much - please please continue both of you writers
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
i'm glad both of you are enjoying this so much.
Jenn, for now they simply don't have the time to go about collecting rare books or papers, and Jack has a huge database of information on his computer, with TEOTWAWKI in mind. they're too busy working on the basics of survival. it'll be up to the next generation, or possibly the one after, to reclaim those things. right now making sure there IS a next generation is their main focus.
Nanny, there are still many people left in the world, Jack hasn't gathered more than a sixth of the remaining population or so, and not too many more will be coming in. also, there are other groups Jack is in contact with and has become neighborly with around the world. they've gathered about half the people in america also, but that still leaves a couple thousand around the country. the point wasn't to get everyone together in one place, but just enough to provide diversity to allow them to breed without fear of defects later on.
the point the story will be getting to however, is that we all have to have faith in God, not in ourselves. Jack proceeded with this through arrogance instead of because God told him to. it's easy for us to put God on the back burner when an answer seems obvious, but every time we do that we find out in the end that all we get is trouble. by putting God forst in all aspects of our lives, our projects are His and everything works out right in the end.
Jenn, for now they simply don't have the time to go about collecting rare books or papers, and Jack has a huge database of information on his computer, with TEOTWAWKI in mind. they're too busy working on the basics of survival. it'll be up to the next generation, or possibly the one after, to reclaim those things. right now making sure there IS a next generation is their main focus.
Nanny, there are still many people left in the world, Jack hasn't gathered more than a sixth of the remaining population or so, and not too many more will be coming in. also, there are other groups Jack is in contact with and has become neighborly with around the world. they've gathered about half the people in america also, but that still leaves a couple thousand around the country. the point wasn't to get everyone together in one place, but just enough to provide diversity to allow them to breed without fear of defects later on.
the point the story will be getting to however, is that we all have to have faith in God, not in ourselves. Jack proceeded with this through arrogance instead of because God told him to. it's easy for us to put God on the back burner when an answer seems obvious, but every time we do that we find out in the end that all we get is trouble. by putting God forst in all aspects of our lives, our projects are His and everything works out right in the end.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
frirefly, thanks. if there's anything you'd like to suggest, i may not use it, but you never know.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
so what'd you think of my solution sis?
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
glad you like it, the doug lesson was one i really wanted to make.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
lol, next i take the weekend off. it's our anniversary and the wife told me NO WRITING!
btw, you asked before if i planned things out. well, in this case i did. the details were sketchy, but the redemption of doug and the nuking of the town were planned. the story was supposed to end with the nuke, but i've decided to see where else i can go with it. who knows, it may go on another 15 chapters, or it may end soon.
btw, you asked before if i planned things out. well, in this case i did. the details were sketchy, but the redemption of doug and the nuking of the town were planned. the story was supposed to end with the nuke, but i've decided to see where else i can go with it. who knows, it may go on another 15 chapters, or it may end soon.
Happy Anniversary!
LOL, I've been waiting on the next chapter, but I totally agree with your wife on this one! You should definitely take the anniversary off. I hope you both had a happy anniversary. I've been married 32 years myself, and it is a great thing to celebrate!
I thought you'd probably need a break from writing also. It is hard to turn out the amount of material you were in such a short time. I'll try to be patient LOL!
LOL, I've been waiting on the next chapter, but I totally agree with your wife on this one! You should definitely take the anniversary off. I hope you both had a happy anniversary. I've been married 32 years myself, and it is a great thing to celebrate!
I thought you'd probably need a break from writing also. It is hard to turn out the amount of material you were in such a short time. I'll try to be patient LOL!
hope you had a good break and I agree you deserve it but with all this rain keeping me in the house I need a good chapter fix to read on my sitting down breaks to keep me working packing - I tell myself I need to pack for another hour before I can stop and read tb2k but a good story helps keep me working thinking about it - you might say read a book but the problem then is I am up to 3am because I can not stop and need to finish the book but this way I can only read one chapter at a time -
tried to read the old stories but ran into the same problem - kept reading and could not stop<g> no time now to enjoy just sitting down and reading a good book<g> hope there is another chapter coming soon but sure will be interesting how you go - interesting twist and good
tried to read the old stories but ran into the same problem - kept reading and could not stop<g> no time now to enjoy just sitting down and reading a good book<g> hope there is another chapter coming soon but sure will be interesting how you go - interesting twist and good
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
thanks everyone. i'm working on the next chapter now, but figuring out where to go from here is tough. what suggestions do you all have...where should i take it now?
Infoscout
The Dude Abides
CFI,
This a great story, do not do like me and get writer's block, dude, keep pumping out those chapters!
How about some hearty Southerners, to round out the ole' population?
There is alot of emphasis on airpower, which makes alot of sense. I have never thought that much about air power in "the end" but your story makes a good point.
In a situation like this, it also seems like people would be drawn to find out about what has happened to the nation's capitol. If there is a government in place, or just to see what is left.
Hey thanks for a great read.
This a great story, do not do like me and get writer's block, dude, keep pumping out those chapters!
How about some hearty Southerners, to round out the ole' population?
There is alot of emphasis on airpower, which makes alot of sense. I have never thought that much about air power in "the end" but your story makes a good point.
In a situation like this, it also seems like people would be drawn to find out about what has happened to the nation's capitol. If there is a government in place, or just to see what is left.
Hey thanks for a great read.
Direction of story
I was wondering what had happened to any government that was left also. Of course, they might still be underground.
Will the folks have to stay inside for a long time now again after the last attack?
Will Jack try to get more people in again, or let it alone. I think this is what he'll do, let it alone, and just start over with what people are there now.
Will there be any medical emergencies, and how will these be handled? Are any of the people suffering from depression or other anxieties? I know there was medical help, or at least some, but is that still there now?
You might could have some other kind of villan. Maybe someone who seems to be super good, but turns out he/she isn't. Someone who tries to lead the people away through kindness etc., instead of the way Sylvia tried.
You might have the surivors branch out and see what is going on in other parts of the country. Maybe something big is threatening the ENTIRE country and the folks have to band together to fight it, whatever it is, maybe a natural disaster or another country or terrorists or something.
Just some ideas and questions I had. I'm sure you've thought way ahead of me. You've done an excellent job on this story, and I look forward to each installment. I'll be thrilled when the next chapter is available.
I was wondering what had happened to any government that was left also. Of course, they might still be underground.
Will the folks have to stay inside for a long time now again after the last attack?
Will Jack try to get more people in again, or let it alone. I think this is what he'll do, let it alone, and just start over with what people are there now.
Will there be any medical emergencies, and how will these be handled? Are any of the people suffering from depression or other anxieties? I know there was medical help, or at least some, but is that still there now?
You might could have some other kind of villan. Maybe someone who seems to be super good, but turns out he/she isn't. Someone who tries to lead the people away through kindness etc., instead of the way Sylvia tried.
You might have the surivors branch out and see what is going on in other parts of the country. Maybe something big is threatening the ENTIRE country and the folks have to band together to fight it, whatever it is, maybe a natural disaster or another country or terrorists or something.
Just some ideas and questions I had. I'm sure you've thought way ahead of me. You've done an excellent job on this story, and I look forward to each installment. I'll be thrilled when the next chapter is available.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
thank you both for the excellent ideas, i may just use some of them!
the last chapter, 33, was hard to write. i had to force it and i'm not happy with it. it reads rough.
i think i got what infoscout said not to get, lol. i need to think about this and pray an see where God wants me to go with it now.
the last chapter, 33, was hard to write. i had to force it and i'm not happy with it. it reads rough.
i think i got what infoscout said not to get, lol. i need to think about this and pray an see where God wants me to go with it now.
Glad to see the pieces, probably read better by those of us that didn't write it.
Was wondering about the power plant at the dam. Probably wouldn't last very long without maintenance. I've always heard that power disappears and needs a regular load or there are problems. The missle site and town wouldn't have been stable loads so what was happening to the chunk of the grid?
Chap
Was wondering about the power plant at the dam. Probably wouldn't last very long without maintenance. I've always heard that power disappears and needs a regular load or there are problems. The missle site and town wouldn't have been stable loads so what was happening to the chunk of the grid?
Chap
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
yeah, the power plant is toast now, the EMP took it out. but before then you have to remember it wasn't connected to the grid. it was a stand alone installation to provide power to a factory. after the plague the factory continued to draw power until Jack had to repair the power lines and finally cut it off. the shelter has been a constant draw since then. also it was designed to be automated.
sssarawolf
Has No Life - Lives on TB
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
So hard to wait for each chapter, sorry i know u have a life. BUt man alive i need the next one
So hard to wait for each chapter, sorry i know u have a life. BUt man alive i need the next one
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
it's coming sara, it's mostly written. the main problem is figuring out where to go from here. i never imagined getting this far, it's undiscovered territory for me.
sssarawolf
Has No Life - Lives on TB
Great
You are doing a wonderful job with this story, & thank you so much.
You are doing a wonderful job with this story, & thank you so much.
CFI, I like the direction you have chosen to go in the story. At first I was thinking, where are my favorite characters, but then the more I read, I thought this will be interesting also. I do hope that eventually they all meet up, or that you will alternate back and forth or something. I think if you ever wrote this out as a novel, you might consider doing an alternate thing, because on the one hand, we have Jack and his wonderfully prepared compound, and on the other hand we have the new characters who are not prepared at all.
Jack had the money to make the best preps, but if events like this were to actually occur, most people would not have those kinds of preps, and would have to find a way to survive more like this second group. With Jack, we can learn and start thinking about those things it would be ideal to have, if we had the funding, or the best things to get with the money we have, but with the second group, we can learn some things about making do with what one has on hand or what one can find. So, not only is the story entertaining, it also is food for thought. People that give no thought to preps of any kind will certainly see that Jack's group has a much easier time of it, thanks to his preps.
Good work CFI.
Jack had the money to make the best preps, but if events like this were to actually occur, most people would not have those kinds of preps, and would have to find a way to survive more like this second group. With Jack, we can learn and start thinking about those things it would be ideal to have, if we had the funding, or the best things to get with the money we have, but with the second group, we can learn some things about making do with what one has on hand or what one can find. So, not only is the story entertaining, it also is food for thought. People that give no thought to preps of any kind will certainly see that Jack's group has a much easier time of it, thanks to his preps.
Good work CFI.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
right on the mark sis, the last three chapters were meant as instruction to those who may not ever put back preps. i am posting this on several boards, not all of them prep boards. the hope is to get them thinking before it's too late.
btw, the next chapter will be about Jack and his group.
btw, the next chapter will be about Jack and his group.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
i'm taking a break folks while i try and figure out where i'm going and how to end this. it's funny, but ending it is harder than starting it.
if you've liked this story you'd love some of the ones at the writers site that inspired me to begin writing, here's the link:
http://www.frugalsquirrels.com/cgi-...33;hardset=0;start_point=0;DaysPrune=0&r=actu
you'll have to register to be able to read the board. the stories are in a forum called 'patriot fiction' about 2/3rd's down the page. there are over 150 stories there.
if you've liked this story you'd love some of the ones at the writers site that inspired me to begin writing, here's the link:
http://www.frugalsquirrels.com/cgi-...33;hardset=0;start_point=0;DaysPrune=0&r=actu
you'll have to register to be able to read the board. the stories are in a forum called 'patriot fiction' about 2/3rd's down the page. there are over 150 stories there.
sssarawolf
Has No Life - Lives on TB
OH MAN
This waiting is really awful,lol I am hooked.
This waiting is really awful,lol I am hooked.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
hopefully soon sara.
sssarawolf
Has No Life - Lives on TB
Thank you so much for another chapter to this great story.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
your enjoyment makes it all worthwhile folks.
KDOG's Domain
Inactive
Keep up the great work!
CFI - I just finished reading Mountain Home. Thank you for a fantastic read! I look forward to any additional chapters you post.
Great work! Keep them coming! :-)
CFI - I just finished reading Mountain Home. Thank you for a fantastic read! I look forward to any additional chapters you post.
Great work! Keep them coming! :-)
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
sorry jenn. actually, i'm having trouble even reading what others write right now. i've been fighting some sort of depression the past few months.