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sbelew

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Hi guys. I've written a few short stories, and am skittish about posting them here, as I think the language may be a bit over the top in this forum (I always did have a pottymouth).

I'm posting links to my stories, but I'd also encourage the writers here to sign up. The site is called East of the Web, and they have a section called Short Stories Uncut which is a good place to post your stories and have them critiqued by other writers. The only catch is, you need to return the favor for other writers.

Without further adieu, here are the stories I've posted there:

http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17347

http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17330

http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17301


Feel free to critique them here, if you prefer not to sign up for EOTW.

Here is the direct link to the site: http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/


Edited to add: Here is a fantastic story from the site (it is NOT my work). Probably the best I've read there since signing up. http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/16768
 
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Christian for Israel

Christian for Israel

Knight of Jerusalem
excellent bro, thanks!

tell me, is everything there so short? my story is up to 40 chapters (and stalled at the moment), but i don't want to post it if everything else there is only a few pages.
 
A.T.Hagan

A.T.Hagan

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http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17347

I almost didn't read this one as it's classified as horror and I just don't care for that genre as a rule.

Still can't say that I'm glad that I read that story but it was good. I wouldn't class it as horror myself. Not sure what I'd class it as, but it was very good. A very good story of betrayal and revenge. Complicated, full of twists, true to life.

From reading the comments below I think you must have polished it up a bit since your original posting as I don't seem much to improve there.

http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17330

This one doesn't quite work for me. I suppose the cashier could have completely disregarded store policy about how much cash she's supposed to keep in her drawer (it happens), but the cop being completely clueless about the bullet wound to the robber's shoulder disrupts my suspension of disbelief.

I like the style and the phrasing though. Go with the skunk joke ending.


http://www.eastoftheweb.com/uncut/node/view/17301

This one didn't do it for me. I think it was this part -

<i>And then…

………

………

………

Was…

Was that what I think it was?

I think maybe it was.

…..

…..

I think she just farted.</i>

It disrupted the flow of the story. The whole reaction struck me as being too extreme.

Looking forward to seeing more of your stuff.

.....Alan.
 
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sbelew

Contributing Member
"tell me, is everything there so short? my story is up to 40 chapters (and stalled at the moment), but i don't want to post it if everything else there is only a few pages."

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Sorry for not responding sooner - yes it is pretty much ONLY short stories.


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AT , I know what you mean about the fart story. There's a good story in there dyin' to get out...I just know it. But let's face it, farts are a difficult topic to tackle in literature :p


Also, I've whittled the gun down to a .22 which makes it a little easier to swallow, I think. May reword it to specify that it's a graze. I'm sure as hell not going to research it the hard way :p
 
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