DISCUSSION THREAD for LightWar: The Chronicles of Dhara
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Some history and details:
The story is based directly on a pen-and-paper RPG by the same name that I created back in 1986. As RPGs go it's huge, with 1.6 million square miles of mapped land area. When I drew the maps out at 1 inch=400 mile scale, it took two pieces of posterboard to hold it.
The game itself is playable, and has been played already by two different teams. Neither got too exceedingly far, as the game has about a thousand hours of content in it, so the team that got the farthest took a couple months to do it and only got maybe 10% into it.
I keep the game's details in three thick binders, which include the formulae for the world's physics and various calculations for RPG fare like saving rolls. It's all straight-up old-school RPG goodness, with a mechanics system similar enough to first-edition AD&D that RPGers can jump in instantly - I'm sure RPGers at TB will notice various aspects of RPGs in the story as it plays out. Eventually I'd love to make a MMORPG for computers out of it, as it'd easily dwarf every existing MMO in both playable area and content. One day, I shall achieve that goal.
The story itself is one I've been pondering for the better part of a decade. In my mind's eye I see the entire thing from the first chapter to the finale, but it takes time to write all that down and check to ensure its continuity. As such it'll be posted quickly at first (as I post what I have already written) and then slowly (as I create new chapters).
I expect to have some crazy long lists of people/places/ythings by the time this is all over.
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The story is based directly on a pen-and-paper RPG by the same name that I created back in 1986. As RPGs go it's huge, with 1.6 million square miles of mapped land area. When I drew the maps out at 1 inch=400 mile scale, it took two pieces of posterboard to hold it.
The game itself is playable, and has been played already by two different teams. Neither got too exceedingly far, as the game has about a thousand hours of content in it, so the team that got the farthest took a couple months to do it and only got maybe 10% into it.
I keep the game's details in three thick binders, which include the formulae for the world's physics and various calculations for RPG fare like saving rolls. It's all straight-up old-school RPG goodness, with a mechanics system similar enough to first-edition AD&D that RPGers can jump in instantly - I'm sure RPGers at TB will notice various aspects of RPGs in the story as it plays out. Eventually I'd love to make a MMORPG for computers out of it, as it'd easily dwarf every existing MMO in both playable area and content. One day, I shall achieve that goal.
The story itself is one I've been pondering for the better part of a decade. In my mind's eye I see the entire thing from the first chapter to the finale, but it takes time to write all that down and check to ensure its continuity. As such it'll be posted quickly at first (as I post what I have already written) and then slowly (as I create new chapters).
I expect to have some crazy long lists of people/places/ythings by the time this is all over.
oO
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
i'll read it as soon as i post my next chapter tomorrow brother, promise. bed time now, lol.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
knowing how much feedback is important to writers (being one myself i crave it, lol) i will respond to each chapter. having read the first i have to say that i personally would be very suspicious. the only thing joe has to go on is these people's word. for all he knows they are the evil ones, and bringing the controllers to them might do more harm than good. they brought him there against his will and convinced him he couldn't go home easily, which doesn't display their goodness very well, lol.
besides, if they were so good to begin with, why create these controllers to begin with? seems a dangerous game. and after creating them they immediately hid them? what was the purpose to that? if they were going to create them they might as well use them, right?
all of my comments so far have been based on the storyline. that of course is the writers license. i am just saying that i wouldn't take what these people said at face value if i was the character.
as for style, you are good at describing the scene, better than i am. the story flows easily and keeps interest, IMHO it is well written.
besides, if they were so good to begin with, why create these controllers to begin with? seems a dangerous game. and after creating them they immediately hid them? what was the purpose to that? if they were going to create them they might as well use them, right?
all of my comments so far have been based on the storyline. that of course is the writers license. i am just saying that i wouldn't take what these people said at face value if i was the character.
as for style, you are good at describing the scene, better than i am. the story flows easily and keeps interest, IMHO it is well written.
Christian for Israel
Knight of Jerusalem
moving along well so far, i'm interested in seeing how this comes out.
if you don't get enough comments here bro, may i suggest joining frugal squirrel and posting this there? the writers forum is very active and you will receive all sorts of comments on your work. the link is: http://www.frugalsquirrels.com/cgi-bin/ubb/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=forum;f=33
if you don't get enough comments here bro, may i suggest joining frugal squirrel and posting this there? the writers forum is very active and you will receive all sorts of comments on your work. the link is: http://www.frugalsquirrels.com/cgi-bin/ubb/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=forum;f=33
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