Comments for Swing Zone II

Mysty

Veteran Member
I posted in the wrong spot :whistle: so sorries lol. I just got all xcited!

Ugh at Luke! He should b Rockless.. Unthroned & unstoned!

Speaks coldly to his friends, and lets his enemies take whatever they want. Reminds me of someone else that is in power atm...

The people need to come togeather & vote him out. Being a pacifist, he may just walk away. Or.... Theft!!!! Stealin the ROCK! Lets go get the rock I say!!!

:sht::sht::sht::sht::sht::sht::sht::sht:!!!!!

Ok, maybe a little less coffee tomorrow night...
 

kaijafon

Veteran Member
even more awesomeness!!! this one is as good if not better than the last!

just to be clear: Lukes desk is squished up in the corner of the wall that the 'weird' vibration/sensation is coming from right? with his home being on the other side....

that is what I got, just wanted to make sure I was reading it right... :) thanks so much!!!
 

Kritter

The one and only...
Correct. :)

And yeah, writing in third person is sooo liberating. It's a thousand times easier to write this way, which is why the story is flowing. (at least, it is to me) I love being able to explore all the characters personalities, especially Zavier's (I obviously am having a love affair with that man!) (writing the scenes where Zav and Drew bang heads is as enjoyable as sex to me!)
 

Genevieve

working on it
Drew misses her, Luke still loves her and Colt has her. geesh. Must make life complicated for Mia.

Whens the guy from the island come and tell them about the giants from the north?! LOL!
 

Kritter

The one and only...
Hehe, don't forget Daniel...he'd still tap her if he could too...lol.

Yeah, see, it's way in the future, so people can pick the gender of their children, so they ended up with a lot more males...so the ratio of men to women favors women considerably..(especially so in Lakeside, which she even mentions to her friends in an email...) and then add that Mia is attractive, headstrong, plays hard to get, and can sometimes be volatile (how many times has she physically attacked Daniel? at least three..) and sometimes she plays naive but you know she can be a very bad girl... so yeah, of course she drives them all crazy...

(That's my story an I'm stickin' to it....)

:P

(If I had to make her go crazy and have a one night stand with one of them, it would actually be Daniel all the way...and he would NOT be gentle...*grin*)

(The island guy and those giants from the north...may...or may not...still be coming...*smiles mysteriously*)

(and sure, Colt's all yours Mysty...) (weee!)
 
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Kritter

The one and only...
The completed thingy..well almost completed..I ran out of steam at 5am, but it's so close. (I totally changed Drew's face, he looks more like I picture him now. He also looks a tad more dangerous..well as dangerous as Drew 'can' look...) Sorry for the enormous size of this file. (sorry..really..) (Bleh, I'm seeing every little flaw in this now...*sigh*)

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kaijafon

Veteran Member
YAY!! moar oodles of awesomeness!!! and another new twist!!!!! thanks so much!!! I was hoping for a bedtime read!
 

sssarawolf

Has No Life - Lives on TB
I am all caught up, tried to stay away as long as possible so I would have more to read when I got to it. Thanks.
 

Kritter

The one and only...
I am all caught up, tried to stay away as long as possible so I would have more to read when I got to it. Thanks.

Cool ssssara. I know its frustrating sometimes to read a story in single chapters, but try to think of it as a daily soap opera instead of a book. And the outline for this one has all of about three words per chapter, so I have to sit here and 'imagineer' it...which is kind of like watching a soap opera myself. :P

In any case, tonight's chapter only just being worked on now...as I had to work to beat a midnight deadline on a contest submission today...so I might be an hour or so late on this one.
 

Genevieve

working on it
I feel bad for Drew and Luke. :(

Luke wants someone to love and Drew needs someone to look out for him and take care of him.
 

Kritter

The one and only...
Thank you for the new chapter :).

Gosh, your welcome. *grin* Trying to do one a day, but it gets rough sometimes. I was just looking around your website. You really live in God's country, what amazing pictures. Would love to see more pictures of all your beautiful children. :)

(Genevieve-- I gotta come back and comment on your comment (actually your last two comments) after the story is completed...Suffice to say, you'll probably understand what I mean by then.)

---------- edit ---------- taking a night off from writing...I'm beat.-------------------
 
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kaijafon

Veteran Member
DANG! sure wish I was Mia right now!!!!! <fans self>

what a hot and spicy scene!

the rest of the chapter wasn't so bad either...

<goes takes cold shower>
 

kaijafon

Veteran Member
I am dyin here!!!! lol!

I gots ta know.... did Mia slap him or let him kiss her or did they get interrupted???

also, can you do a left to right naming of the picture? I think I am getting Luke and Seth and Daniel and Drew mixed up.... thanks
 

Kritter

The one and only...
I'm about an hour from posting this,..been working on it all morning. :P

The characters, (and of course it's just my personal vision of them).. would be Grace, Zavier, Daniel, Drew and then Luke, Colt, Mia and Seth. But it's not done yet, really, and Luke looks a bit younger here than I mean him to. (I was thinking much closer to like an Ian Somerhalder...type of guy but...my drawing / paint skills just aren't on par for that kind of perfection yet.) (Seth didn't really come out like i pictured him either, but I keep laughing about how much he came out looking like Ben Stein in this picture, and now whenever he speaks in story I hear THAT voice, lol, so now the character in my mind has evolved to fit the picture, which cracks me up)
 

kaijafon

Veteran Member
thank you for new chapter! ooo la la!!! sizzle!!!

and thanks for the names, that is who I thought each one was :) yay me!! lol!

Still wishing I was Mia right then!!!! I'm sure I don't want to be her though in the next chapter cause it is feelin' like Luke is about to figure out what she REALLY was doing there!

edited to add: I hope if Mia and Seth get that rock she doesn't feel TOO bad about it, cause TECHNICALLY she is the one who FOUND it FIRST!! lol!
 

Kritter

The one and only...
Oh yeah, I have a feeling Luke's gonna be miffed. I'm feeling sorry for Colt, he's been taking a beating these last few chapters. I can just see him glaring at me when I write, like 'cut me a break already, will you?"
 

Mysty

Veteran Member
I hope Colt understands because they are perfect for eachother. Well, yes.. she enjoyed it.. but that doesn't mean she really wants that. We all have had moments that we ... well.. moments ... I mean, im sure that others have had moments. Momentarily at a loss for words.. cya tomorrow :D
 

sssarawolf

Has No Life - Lives on TB
First thing she needs to do when Colt gets back is tell him what happened with Luke and why.
Thanks for the new chapter.
 

Kritter

The one and only...
I know I'm jumping around a lot between characters...so I just wanna make sure...is everyone able to follow this okay so far?
 

kaijafon

Veteran Member
Mr. Marsh is very creepy! Watch out Grace!!!

Looks like Luke is having to grow up and realize sometimes ya gotta fight!

thanks so much for the new chapter!!!!!
 
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